June 28, 2011

Haiku Sticky #103


© Diane Mayr, all rights reserved

I shouldn't have bothered to post this, but I thought you might like to see what a bad haiku looks like! This is one of those haiku that you read and then say, "So what?" I did have a point in writing it, but I completely missed expressing it! Next time I'll do better.
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4 comments:

  1. IrisJune 30, 2011 at 5:49 AM

    Dear Diane
    I should thank u for this lesson :)
    Brgds
    Iris

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  2. Diane MayrJune 30, 2011 at 7:41 AM

    Hi Iris! Glad to be of assistance!

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  3. Gisele LeBlancJune 30, 2011 at 11:37 AM

    Hi, Diane!

    It might be fun to post something like this and then post a revised version, just so people can see the process. Might be very enlightening. Just a thought.

    Gisele :)

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  4. Diane MayrJune 30, 2011 at 10:30 PM

    Thanks for the suggestion, Gisele. I might do that if I can figure out exactly what it is I'm trying to say and how to say it in as few words as possible. I may need to write it as something other than a haiku.

    I like the weedy wildflowers, especially the pinks, that grow in my yard, but, unfortunately, I have to maintain a suburban lawn!

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