Surprisingly, Smith-Start's poems are not written in the typical 5-7-5 format. That's good. But, Smith-Start begins every line with a capital, and the poems end with a period. That's not so good. That's as far as I'll go on the critique. Simply enjoy this sample from day 2, it is quite amusing:
They float and scratch and stamp,The poems from day 1 are not nearly as successful as haiku, but I'll let you be the judge.
And fringing turns to
Self flagellation.
So, would you like a challenge? Come up with your own haiku/senryu for this fashion statement from long ago:
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Here's mine:
fashion week--
all day long silkworms munch
mulberry leaves
Float, fringe, flagellate--as I writer, I have to like those sounds!
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